Personal Essay
Joshuah M. Powers
In my life there have been several people I have been to rely on in numerous emotional & mental struggles. There’s of course my family (Mom, Dad, little brother, older sister), my sister’s friends Eric and Kendra, and last but not least my friends Nate, Kenny, Scott, and Timmy. These individuals, at one time or another, have helped me pick myself up in my lowest and most strenuous moments. Wither it was my family or my friends trying to instill there several different point of knowledge, which would later help me become as wiser than before as well as increased my confidence as well as my popularity.
Now as far as how my friends have been there to support me, I was never a popular, talkative, or that interesting of an individual. When I first started high school I had only 2 friends. So they convinced me to play football to get more comfortable around other people which I did and began making new friends. Even though I was making friends I was still not that talkative, and I was actually rather embarrassed by my large size, goofy/sloppy appearance, and lack of social skills/knowledge which kept me from being in on many conversations with the new set of peers I was introduced to. As my 4 years of high school went on my I had few problems, which I see now as insignificant and a waist of my time then, but I was always concerned with having a girlfriend.
Around my sophomore year I had my first girlfriend who, for some reason I’d be with forever. Until after a year & a half my first and only girlfriend to date, started “messing around” with some of the kids I played football with., which made me very depressed and sick to my stomach. For weeks I barely talked, did my work, or even paid attention in class because I felt worthless & easily replaceable. My friend Kenny (who at the time wasn’t my friend) noticed that I wasn’t doing any work or even talking in shop. He approached me and asked me why I was looking so down, I explained my situation and after he gave great advice because he had gone through a similar experience with his on/off ex-girlfriend of 3 years. Even though I look back on that time in my life and realize it was stupid and not worth being as upset as I was, if it was not for Kenny making the attempt to see what was wrong I probably would have done something dangerous or maybe life threatening.There are not enough words, phrases, or praises that I could articulate to describe there worth & contribution to making me who I am today. These few examples I have listed are just the some of the many things that have made me more confident, wise, and humble about my life as well as the value of life in general & that life isn’t complete until you have great friends and/or family that is willing to stick there necks out and put everything on the line to make sure your happy and safe. There are so many moments made by and with these individuals that have dramatically changed my life over the years. Finally it’s those moments that I hold dearest to me with the most personal regard.
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ReplyDeleteThis is a good choice of subculture, and you have some good details, particularly in para. 2. But I think you need to collect more detail, and think too about what yr focus is (what aspect of the subculture are you exploring? what's the main thing you want to say about the subculture?)
First sentence is confusing, maybe trying to make too general a statement? Next sentences jump from difficulty of scheduling to starting a band to who's in the band, etc. Try to keep each para. focused on one main idea. Are you talking here about a particular band? (needs to be clearer--introduce us to them)
How did you find out this information? Did you interview someone? What's yr connection? You could describe more about how they set up their space (could be its own para.)
I didn't realize until para. 2 that you're talking about screaming music (is that a type of music? or punk rock?) Make that clear right at beginning. In para. 2 good to talk about expectations of this subculture vs reality, but in places can be more specific (what types of tattoos, for ex.?)
I'd like to see more about what those sessions look/sound like, during the week and esp. on Friday nights. We don't really see any of the band members as individuals--you could do that in the context of one of those scenes. (In fact, if you collected enough specific details a Friday night session could be the bulk of yr ethnography.)
Usage note: be sure to check "there" vs "their" vs "they're"